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:new: 05- 01-13 Edit: I've changed a large part of the story in order to let it make more sense. If anyone who previously read it would like to give me their opinion, that would be fantastic!

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For a boy named Ace, the concept of days means nothing. Everyday he spends inside his room with barely any company. No memories of his past exist. As time goes by, he begins to wonder about his situation. Why is he alone? What happens after the blackouts he seems to get so often? But most of all - what is wrong with him?


Phew... I finally finished this. This has been sitting on my computer for over a month now. Now it's done! I don't know if I ever worked so hard on a short story before. In any case, I think it's save to say that this was my weapon in beating writers block. Ha! :dummy:

Although I'd love to hear your interpretations, I understand it's kind of confusing and that might might it difficult to read. So I'll give a little explanation here. Don't read if you don't want to know what's wrong with Ace. Or consider this an alternate description. :aww:

In a far future, the dating business has taken it up a notch. Ace, their fourth and most succesful subject, is a genetically manipulated human boy. The modifications cause him to go into a frenzy whenever he is in the presence of deep love. He's used by the dating company to help couples decide whether or not they should marry by detecting whether there is any love between the couple. After killing his two caretakers, Ace spends all of his days in silence and with no company but himself. However, that changes when he decides he's had enough one day. The problem is that he is altered in such a way that his body heals very quickly... and that true freedom might be something he will never know.

To be honest, I have no idea where the idea for this story come from. It suddenly entired my brain, so I rushed to my notebook and began scribbling down keywords. And now it's a full story... I'll admit I'm a little bit proud of it.

But please! Feedback and critiques would be immensely welcome. :heart: I honestly don't mind if you tear this apart and burn me to the ground, actually, I'd love that (now love is a strong word... maybe 'appreciated' works better here). No, really. Hit me with all you've got. If you could keep it polite thoughthat'd be splendid. :aww:

Here are some questions for you, if you have the time and will to answer them:

:bulletred: Was the story itself clear enough (enough to understand at least somewhat what was going on)? If not, could you tell me which part wasn't?
:bulletorange: As far as realism goes in a story like this, did you think it was realistic?
:bulletyellow: Was the ending mismatched/too abrupt?
:bulletgreen: What did you think of the daughter's reaction?
:bulletblue: Did this story evoke any emotions in you, good or bad?
:bulletpink: I would like to know if the whole thing surrounding love was clear enough near the ending.
:bulletpurple: Just for fun: how do you think it'd end?
:bulletblack: Any general comments?


Thank you for reading & I hope you've enjoyed it! :iconlubplz:
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Starry-Eyed-Writer Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
I loved this story.
The story itself was pretty easy to understand. The admission of 'the L-word' did make it confusing, but it was still a good mystery. I liked the ending, I felt the daughter's reaction was realistic.
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you very much for your comment! :huggle: I'm glad to hear that it made at least some sense after the revisions. :aww:
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cherrifae Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really enjoyed reading this!
Was the story itself clear enough (enough to understand at least somewhat what was going on)? If not, could you tell me which part wasn't?
I read the teeny explanation part, and I wish that this was better reflected in the story

As far as realism goes in a story like this, did you think it was realistic?
This was very realistic. You did a good job portraying Ace and keeping his thoughts and actions true to himself.

Was the ending mismatched/too abrupt?
The ending is fantastic. I like when it's left to my imagination!

What did you think of the daughter's reaction? Perfectly plausible :)

Did this story evoke any emotions in you, good or bad?
YES! I felt so bad for Ace. That is a horrible way to exist.

I would like to know if the whole thing surrounding love was clear enough near the ending.
Like I said before, I wish your teeny description in your comments was better reflected in the actual story. I got that he was an experiment and had bad reactions to something, but the reason behind his anger/blackouts wasn't clear enough.

Just for fun: how do you think it'd end?
I thought he'd find out his actual urpose and either die or escape

Any general comments?
Overall, I LOVE IT!
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:iconlaeneris:
Laeneris Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much for taking the time to read the story & answering my questions! :heart: I know it's a long story so I really appreciate it.

It seems that even with major revisions it's still not clear enough... I'll have to work on that some more. :meow: Thanks for pointing that out! I'm glad that you loved the other parts of it. Actually, I'm super happy! :squee:
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cherrifae Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome!!! :)
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Cranberry413 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
I already did a critique and I don't want to delete that one, so I'll just leave a super long comment instead.

Was the story itself clear enough?
I think it was a lot clearer this time around! I'm still not entirely sure I understand what exactly Ace was created for (without already knowing, since I believe you explained it to me when I previously critiqued it). However, aside from that I think it was good! Although I have one tiny little question: You may have answered this in the piece and I stupidly missed it, but did Ace actually kill Naomi and Dai? :tears:

As far as realism goes in a story like this, did you think it was realistic?
YES! I think with all the editing you've done, you added in a lot of detail that makes it seem more realistic and you've also made a lot of emotional scenes have that extra kick. It's great!

Was the ending mismatched/too abrupt?
I can't remember exactly how it was before, but I think it's improved- I really like how it is now. I think it's actually really fitting.

What did you think of the daughter's reaction?
I think it's much more realistic this time around! I liked it before, but I love it now. I really love the inclusion of her knowledge of his purpose and how she helped create him.

Did this story evoke any emotions in you, good or bad?
Oh yeah. Especially this time around when you added so much to it. I was reading the ending while sad music was playing from a movie and that definitely aided your writing. Phew, it was getting to me without any music and then the music started and I kinda almost let it go. :XD:

I would like to know if the whole thing surrounding love was clear enough near the ending.
With the editing and the extra additions with all that new info, I think it's a lot clearer this time around. I'm still not entirely sure what he has to do with it (basing it off of the story itself) but I thought it was clearer than last time.

How do you think it'd end?
I was going to say that she'd shoot and kill him, but then I saw the line "If what they said is true, then I can't die." PLOT TWIST! :iconstarelaplz: Now I'm conflicted. :grump: I'm gonna go with the idea that she knows a secret way to kill him and does that. :D

General comments
The woman? I thought she was like, a little girl.. :blushes: Mainly because I pictured Naomi and Dai as fairly young themselves.. But I like how the daughter is older, because a little girl wouldn't really work in this situation. :giggle:
Oh, and I don't really know where to fit this it: But why is Ace not allowed to look at or talk to anyone? I mean, how did that rule come about? I'm terribly sorry if that was mentioned in the writing. :iconsitinthecornerplz:

Anyways, I don't think I caught anything wrong with it... I really really this new, edited version! :iconiloveit-plz:

Oh! PS: after finding my magnifying glass and reading the little summary, it's all clear now! I really love this idea. I think overall you really executed it quite well. :clap:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Student Writer
Berry. I love you. Seriously. :heart: (in a friendly way!) This comment is all I could ever ask from you, and more! It means a lot to me that you took the time to read through it again and write about your thoughts in detail, because I know it's a long piece. ^^;

So I've succeeded in letting it make more sense? YES. :la: That was my main worry, that the meaning and idea behind the story would get lost inbetween the words. Whether he killed them or not is up to the reader to decide, but if you'd like to hear my thoughts; (warning, it's a bit gruesome) Ace first stabbed Dai with the scissors, until Naomi rushed in to help her husband. No one else dared enter the room at that time. Naomi was unable to stop Ace and suffered the same fate. :no:

The ending before was much more rushed and the daughter never revealed her part in Ace's story. Looking back, I really hate that ending! This is much better. Glad to hear you thoughts so too, and especially about her reaction to everything. :D

I intentionally never revealed their ages. :iconteheplz: Besides, Ace wouldn't have anyone to compare his caretakers with so he would have no idea how old they were (in their 50s by the way). He doesn't know his own age, either. The reason that he's not allowed to see anything/talk is all a big lie. His voice doesn't make people deaf, and his eyes don't do anything special. The blindfold is mostly to keep Ace under control, since he has such a strong urge to not harm anything, the scientists can keep easy control over him because they know Ace will comply. :nod: He's not allowed to talk because if someone answers him directly, like Dai for example, he might hear the affection in their voices. That's why they communicate through the speaker thing. :D Touching is forbidden for the same reason. I hope that made some sense!

You've been way too kind to me with these words! Thank you so much! :iconslowhugplz: :heart:
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Cranberry413 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Aw :aww: :heart: I'm happy you like the comment! It may take me a while, but I'll always read your writing and try to provide some kind of feedback :meow:

Yeah, it makes much more sense now! Oh, he kills them?! I probably would have thought the same thing seeing as how that's just how I think. :blushes:

I figured as much, but I really thought they were younger and I can't figure out why! :XD:
I understood it's a lie since Naomi and Dai were both able to be with him without all that, I just wasn't sure why they were lying to him. But I get it now! :dummy: I didn't realize his ability to sense love was that strong! :wow:

:iconohstopityouplz: It's not a problem :) You've been a million times more helpful with your comments!
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Student Writer
The same goes for you! :icongiantlovehug:

To be honest I feel really bad for subjects 1, 2 and 3, since they were even less perfect. 1 and 2 got put down, 3 is being kept should Ace cease to function. They're still working on a human who can just point out whether others love eachother or not rather than go on a rampage. :stare:

Yes, I made a whole backstory... stupid. :iconotlplz:
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Cranberry413 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013
It's not stupid at all! I love backstories. :D You could eventually make it into a whole novel and have it from multiple perspectives... :eyes:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Student Writer
That reminds me... did I mention to you that I'm basically rewriting my entire novel? :stare: I'm still working on the plot, and it made me really sad to decide as such but my current story has been completely messed up and stuffed with too many scenes that are in there because I wanted them to... so... I will rework it. :iconhappymeowplz:

And after that, I've already fleshed out a whole new one! :dummy:
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Cranberry413 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
No you didn't! :no: I kind of hit a wall on my own writing, so I'm thinking of going back and editing some from the beginning :aww: I can finally put those helpful comments of your's to good use!

But anyway, so you've got it all figured out then? :D
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Writer
Aw man, seems more people have been cursed by the writer's demise these past few days... :( What blocks you from writing? If you'd like I could attempt to help you :aww:

I got my next novel mostly figured out :giggle: But I must and shall finish this one first!
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Cranberry413 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
And it's not even super long... haha sorry about that. :blushes:
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feekmasterson Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this was a really intriguing story. you did a great job conveying the hopelessness of ace's situation, and his confusion towards an unnamed feeling (love), which is something i can totally relate to. his special ability of sensing love being used by a corporation was a really cool part too, and i dont know if you have read (or seen) minority report, but it kinda reminded me of that a little bit. but its definitely a bleak kind of story, and the end doesnt really offer any hope, but then again, i dont know if he died or not lol.

anyways, really fantastic story! definitely evoked a hopeless kind of feeling in me, as well as a very real empathy for ace, since being frustrated by emotions we cant name is a problem we both share. amazing job!!
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you for taking the time to read through all that, I know it's a long story. ^^; :huggle: I'm both happy and sad that this was something you could relate to. Sad because I wouldn't wish for anyone to feel this way yet happy that it made you feel something. :heart:

I've never seen or read Minority Report, but I'm interested now! Would you suggest I find the movie or the story?
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feekmasterson Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
youre totally welcome! and thank you for posting such an awesome and original story. and you should definitely be happy! ive always found that the best stories and poems are able to evoke strong emotions, even if they are negative one. making the reader feel strongly, regardless if its a good or bad feeling, is always something to be proud of. and you should definitely be proud!

im a bit biased, since i actually saw the movie first. but theyre both good (the story was written by phillip k. dick, who wrote all kinds of good sci-fi, and the movie was directed by steven speilberg). but i would go with the story first, since the movie takes (a lot) of liberties. but the basic premise is the same. its about a police unit called "the department of pre-crime", and they utilize these psychic individuals to catch criminals before they commit crimes. the use of unique and special people by a powerful organization for a "greater good" is a similar theme in your story too, which is why i was reminded of "minority report".

sorry for the marathon post lol. again, fantastic job!
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Writer
Marathon post :laughing: That's a great name, although I didn't mind the length at all. :D I like long comments. Anyway. I actually like writing about negative emotions more, and I barely write anything in which nobody gets hurt in one way or another... but thank you! I'm a little bit proud of it. :blush:

Okay, so you're saying I should read the story first? :D It sounds interesting and definitely something that can make you think.
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feekmasterson Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
haha yeah, i sometimes i tend to just write really long comments, so i figured i should give them a name ;P but im glad you dont mind them lol. well, keep writing the way you do! they may be negative emotions, but you write them really beautifully! and you definitely should be proud :hug:

i would recommend reading the story first. just because the movie differs quite a bit from it. and for me, its always hard to reconcile differences with the story if ive seen the movie first.
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much. :blush: That's really nice of you to say!

I'll try to find it one of these days. :nod:
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yukkurionion Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013
*First story I've read that didn't involve any of my fandoms or anything like that-
And I am so
interested
And intrigued and
oh
my cod
oafjaiojfa english dictionary y u no give me better adjective :iconshakeshakeplz:

I am so in love with this.*
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student Writer
I'm the first writer you watched and now this is also the first 'stand-alone' story you read?! :icondesucheeksplz: I'm honored! :iconmoeblushplz: So glad that you liked it, I know you haven't read the previous version but I hope that this one at least gave you an idea of what was wrong with Ace. :dummy:

Thank you so much! :iconmahfeelzplz: I would say that Ace loves you too but I'm not sure if that would be such a great idea. :stare:
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yukkurionion Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
*BABY YOU DONT HAVE TO BE HONORED.
imnoteventhatspecial

Q v Q I GOT THE IDEA, I I I WAS SO HNGNGNAGMANGMANG OVER ACE
BABY I DONT MIND IF ACE LOVES ME
I DONT MIND IT ALL
Q V Q
OH MY COD
I DONT MIND IT,
imsortofamasochistanyway*
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Writer
I'm honored either way! :iconlawooplz:

*shoves Ace your way* Have fun & play nice you two! :iconteheplz:
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yukkurionion Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
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JessamineDiane Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So hang on, how did he kill his carers?
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Student Writer
It's not really specified here and open for interpretation, but to me, here's what happened:

When Ace heard Dai laugh, it was a kind of sign of affection towards Ace (which he can't stand) so he went into his overdrive mode, grabbed the scissors and used them to stab Dai. He survived, then Ace strangled him. :( Dai's wife Naomi rushes in to save her husband, but suffers the same fate. That's when Ace comes back to his senses, with the source of love removed.

:(
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JessamineDiane Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh right, I see.

Why can't he stand affection or love?
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Student Writer
That's mostly the point of the story, I'll try to explain it to you (can also be found in the artists description :D) :

Ace has been genetically modified by a dating company to go into a frenzy whenever he comes near love and/or affection. They use him to determine if couples are a good match together by putting them near eachother. If Ace freaks out, then that means the two people are a good match! :aww:
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JessamineDiane Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh cool! That's a really good idea.
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:iconlaeneris:
Laeneris Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :tighthug: I think it was one of my most original ideas so far, maybe not the best, but unique. :aww:
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JessamineDiane Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's a really good idea, though it's not really clear in the story. :) You're a very good writer though.
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Student Writer
Yes, I've been planning to rewrite most of it, while keeping the main idea, but to make the whole dating idea a lot more clear! :typerhappy:
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Renardethefox Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm reading this with tears in my eyes. Your struggling certainly payed off. I love this story and I can't think of ways to improve it. About your questions; I don't think the story was 100% clear, but it was good that way. I didn't have to know every detail in order to experience the story, on the opposite. Since Ace doesn't know what's happening to him and why, it adds a lot when the reader doesn't know it either.

The reaction of the daughter was very plausible to me, and the ending was great. Abrupt, but not too abrupt and the open ending allowed me to think the whole thing over again. (This sounds very vague, I know, but I don't know how to put it better.)

About the emotions... I'm not sure what I felt when reading this story, so I can't help you on this part of the story. But it was good. It was great.
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! Your comment just gave me the biggest smile on my face. :D :iconsweethugplz: It feels good to know you thought it was understandable and plausible since those two things were the ones I worried most about.

I really appreciate you leaving feedback, especially because you said it's kind of hard to do. So thank you! :heart: :icondweebdanceplz:
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Renardethefox Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You didn't have to worry. It was great. :hug: I love reading your stories. You're very welcome. :D
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Charlimonster Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
It was a good story :) I was intrigued and didn't want to stop reading it! now I want to know if she pulled the trigger or not now :O haha :) :hug:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you, hearing that means a lot to me! :iconsnuggleplz: She pulled the trigger. The question is whether Ace survives... :tears:
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Charlimonster Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
I'm glad :) :glomp: now I want to know if he does :( gahhh XD :huggle:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Writer
We'll never find out! :nuu:

If it helps any, in my mind, he died. :iconsadnod:
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Charlimonster Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012
awwwww :( noooo :( :huggle:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Student Writer
I know... :iconreallysadplz:
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Charlimonster Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
:( :'(
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is so cool! I was slowly scrolling down, wide eyed, edging closer to the screen!! :eager:
How you fit his descriptions of the past and of what happened into the actual text of the present is wonderful!! And the daughters reaction was plausible, realistic at that!

Though there is one thing that confused me. He says at one part that he has no mirror, thus doesn't know what he looks like. A few sentences later: "No... that can't be right. I don't look like them at all."

Other than that I understood everything, apart from him being in the dating industry. I would have expected criminology, so that surprised me a bit. But that's a new idea, and very original at that :clap:

Oh and when we go visit Samson, Hughes and Jynk you should take Ace along as well. That would be fun :la:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Writer
Aaah, thank you! :iconaawplz: I hope you didn't bump into your screen~ :giggle:

I'm really glad you thought the daughter's reaction was plausible, I was a bit worried about that. :D Then again, the entire concept of this story doesn't make a lot of sense... it's weird. I hope you don't find me creepy for writing something like this. :iconwthplz:

You're right - thank you for pointing that out! I've changed it into something more neutral for now, 'till I get a better idea. :aww:

Those people from the dating corporation are really mean for using Ace as experiment. :( If you don't really understand the concept, feel free to tell me and I'll try to explain it to you in a better way! :D Ace goes into a frenzy whenever he senses (true) love or affection, so they use put him in a room with couples to see if the couples have any future together. Makes sense? :dummy:

It would! Just make sure they don't end up liking Ace, or results will be... not so pretty. :stare:
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Alas I did not! I successfully avoided that! :D

Nope, you're not creepy! :dummy: If something like this would make a person creepy... remember that I created half-humanoid robots with an intense killing drive, a world completely destroyed with weird mutated monsters and weird mutated plants. :stare: ... We both would be weird then.

Okay, makes a lot more sense now ^^

I think so too. I felt really bad for him, and was actually hoping someone would free him, but this end is soo much better :eager: No one knows what will happen next! :meow:

Yup all makes sense ^^

:noes: That would be bad! Jynk would think he's weird, Samson would want to probe him and Hughes wouldn't care I think. And if he does start liking Ace I'll give Hughes food. That's number one for him. After Jynk and Samson of course. They're family ^^ If it really ends up bad we'll get Rover :clap:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Writer
Your screen thanks you. :iconteheplz:

Oh, right... :stare: To be honest, as much as I'd like to explore Scavenger's world, I would probably last under a day, then be ripped apart by Signals or something. :iconcryforeverplz: And my world isn't safe either! :nuu: I guess we have nowhere to say but on Earth. :shrug:

By the way! Are there going to be sentient plants as well? :iconheplz: Like upgraded venus fly traps?

You can't beat food, I suppose. :XD: It's in their best interest to either dump Ace somewhere or develop something to keep him under control... :iconscaredplz:
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You could come to my world! My favorite people would keep you safe - they love guests and they are very loyal! So even if you get in danger they would never leave you behind! :dummy:

I don't know, I haven't read the whole novel yet... I wish I could ask the author!!

They could put him into a comatose state... or just infuse a neurotoxin that paralyses him... :meow:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Writer
That sounds nice, actually! :iconlubplz: Alright, I'm in. Now I just gotta build a teleporter to get to them and we're all set! :D

Huh? What author of what novel?! :nuu:

Forever? Then they'd have to drag his body along everyday. :no:
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Teleporter? But we have... imagination~ :iconimaginationplz:

The novel you're reading? Scavengers. Boy would I love to pick the authors brain. I would ask her a ton of questions...

Naw, just for a while, and if he feels better again they'll give him a tranquillizer. :meow: I have it all planned.
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