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I went to the beach, it was a beautiful evening, and suddenly this wave of inspiration hit me. I quickly scribbled it down, took a few days to modify it, and this is the result. I'm really proud of it, also it's not really my usual style but it was fun to do. :heart:

The picture and poem both belong to me. The sunset is an older picture from the same beach I went to today, and it was absolutely gorgeous. It was also not edited in any way. :)

Please leave a comment if you liked it, or help me out with some constructive critisicm. Everything is appreciated. Go on, I can take it. :huggle:

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shep4life Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Love it...positive!
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you - it's meant to be exactly that! :la:
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Rare on this site!
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:iconlaeneris:
Laeneris Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Student Writer
I think it's something we sometimes forget to think about. Negative events seem to draw a lot more attention, but I believe there's always a speck of sunlight if you look hard enough. :)
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I always attempt to leave a little light on in my poetry...as dark as they can be...hope is our last great spark
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Student Writer
:nod:!
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Bravo!
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cskadoz Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   General Artist
:worship:
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:iconlaeneris:
Laeneris Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2013  Student Writer
:bow:
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful... It has a clear feel, yet somewhat mysterious and new (: It's really wonderful! :dummy:
I'm probably repeating myself, but so what xD
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student Writer
I don't mind the repetition of compliments! :iconlabananadanceplz:
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D Good, cause it's awesome :eager:
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baccaratta Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I can see why, this is the best poem I've read in a long time.
The "breath in/out" part is unconventional but you make excellent use of it and it works very well.
Makes me jealous you have such beautiful sunsets, our sun is only up a few hours a day over here and I would love to spend a night at the beach enjoying a view like that.
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
It is? :blush: Thank you so much! To hear that from a fellow poem (if I still consider myself one) means a lot. :iconlubplz:

I'm jealous of your aurora things up in the sky... hey, we should switch houses! :dummy: Kidding, haha. I do admit that we have nice sunsets here, although I'd never seen everything become pink before! :D
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baccaratta Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Feel honored to call you my fellow poem :heart:

No I couldn't do that actually x) And yeah the auroras can be a sight of a lifetime, we have some pretty sunsets here aswell but they are sometime far inbetween. should check out this one taken by uni photographer a few years back. [link]
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student Writer
I feel a little bit stupid, I meant to say 'poet' :iconotlplz: Sorry!

That was a gorgeous picture by the way. Thank you for sharing!
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baccaratta Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I wondered, but i'll just let it be so can we be stupid togethet :3 np :)
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justvrit Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Student General Artist
This is beautiful Laeneris!! And I read it in the perfect time makes me feel it and appreciate it even more...hope you have a beautiful day girl :hug:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you, I really appreciate your kind words! :tighthug: Today was a bit... well, painful, but with your wishes I'm sure tomorrow will be a great day! :aww:
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justvrit Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Student General Artist
It was painful!!? :O_o: nooooo!! let me send you a big :hug:!! Hope things get better soon!!
you're very welcome by the way :huggle:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks for the giant hug! :icongiantlovehug: I hope so too :D
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justvrit Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Student General Artist
:D
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Shink0u-chan Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Why do I feel like crying? This is so serene...I can feel this poem.
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Student Writer
I'm sorry, I didn't mean to make you feel like that! But... it's a really big compliment to hear it moved you. :blush: Thank you! :heart:
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Shink0u-chan Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
don't mention it :D
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theWitchofGrich Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012
very beautiful :D :D
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very much - and for the fave as well! :squee: I'm glad that you liked it. :heart:
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theWitchofGrich Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012
you're welcome :)
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:O your work... was surprisingly good... and to my critique just add that I love the start as well... as if you are about to tell a tale :) Beautiful work in my opinion.
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very much! :D I know that the way I talk (type, actually :giggle:) probably doesn't make me look like a writer, but I do try to improve my writing skills. :aww:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
NO to me it actually does. There are certain feelings I get when I feel a person naturally writing and a person who is just... well forcefully writing. Your work really moved me and it was honest writing :)
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Student Writer
Aw, well, thank you then! :blushes:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome :heart:
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sailorcancer01 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist
that's a realy good poem that you wrote,Laeneris I saw that you've been a deviant for 3 years I've been a deviant for 1 year 'cause on Saturday September 17th 2011 I activated my d a account 4 days after your birthday(Sepember 13th) this year I celebrated my 1rst anniversary. BTW I'm sailorcancer01.
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :tighthug: And very belated one-year dA anniversary to you! :D
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Student Writer
This is such a serene and lovely poem! :) Your choice of word is very nice, and this poem had a really calming mood. Excellent work~
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! It's so nice of you to say that, it really makes me happy. :happycry:
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Student Writer
You're very welcome! :)
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poeticjunk Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012
That is so beautiful and when i read it i can imagen sitting on that beach with you. I really enjoyed reading this. x
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! I'm really happy that it made you imagine, as that is ultimately a writer's job, isn't it?! :D
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poeticjunk Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012
Mean's your a good writer :D
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Student Writer
:iconiloveyouplz:
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Shannon-Sweeney Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Featured [link]
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:iconlaeneris:
Laeneris Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you~! :iconiluplz:
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Shannon-Sweeney Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :aww:
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Radicalvince5 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Student Artist
Almost made me cry :')
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Student Writer
Aww, I'm glad to hear that it moved you... :huggle:
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Radicalvince5 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Student Artist
:)
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thehanimal Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this piece just glows with serenity. and it has beautiful imagery, too. it's just a great way to look at life.
thanks, you made my day a little better ^.^
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student Writer
Aw, thank you so much!! :la: I really appreciate your kind words. :huggle:

p.s. is that... Finland in your avatar?
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