Edit 24/08/13: changed some minor things, especially near the ending.
Word total: 1528
A promptless piece that I wrote inbetween working on my bigger story. Ending up like this old lady is definitely one of my greatest fears - to forget everything and ultimately, to end up a stranger in both this world and my body... how terrifying.
I don't think I should write dialogue between a dying parent and a child anymore for a while. It's seriously bad for your heart/feelings.
My critique for
Some questions for those of you who want to help me out:
How did you feel about the way Tom explained everything to his son - was he too blunt? Too vague?
Was the transition between the two parts too rapid?
What did you like most about this piece, if anything?
How about the least?
Spelling/grammar errors? Weirdly structured sentences?
Comments and feedback appreciated, as always.